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I came upon this blog randomly and I found it to be weird, funny, and very entertaining. If you get bored I'd recommend skimming through it for entertainment!

Good flow, nice writing. Nice writing, especially in 3 minutes! The only problem I had with the poem was that google ads put two links for suicide prevention watch as ...

Have you done a re-write of this, I'd love to read it? This was good. I have to agree with one of the previous critiques about all the punctuation. It ...

I liked this. I like Haiku's, but I'm very picky about them b/c people usually aren't very good at them, b/c I find most people that try and write them ...

I liked the motif of the dakota. I think personally you could fit something about him reading Catcher in the Rye in the dakota, like have imagery of the book ...

This was a very interesting piece of writing for a 60yr old lady lol. Well, I don't know if this turned me on, off, scared me, made me think of ...

The story is called "A Little Cloud" by James Joyce in his short story collection Dubliners!

I'd have to agree with the other reviews, the fourth line made me stop because it seemed out of place. This was well done though. I liked it a lot. ...

This is a good first poem All the periods though for such short lines threw me off. I'd comma or semicolon after every line and before the next. I'd take ...

This flowed really well and I found myself engaged the entire time. The only thing that felt out of place was this line: … I feel like I’m falling This ...

This is really good. I didn't stop once in reading it, even with the length. Nice flow, good usage and choice of words. "In stripey pink" Loved that. Nice inventiveness ...

Yeah this sounded like some opening dialogue to some pretentious indie film. Not feeling it sorry. Don't assume your reader is dumb.

Now comes the interesting part I personally am not into this kind of stuff, even if it is a sarcastic teenage narrator, just tell me the part. Also, i disagree ...

Ha-ha, no, no it's not suppose to be from a horse's perspective, that's interesting that you thought that though! It's a humorous piece, suppose to be a guy sitting on ...

I'd have to agree with Cade, but what I would recommend is keep writing those types of things to get them out of your system, and then take those ideals ...